unknown world

Suspense Stories | Jan 20, 2012 | 2 min read
84 Votes, average: 4 out of 5
Don't know how i ended up here, this place, this world, it should not even exist. This place should not be here! But yet am standing here witnessing it realness first hand.  I been walking in this hollow field for some time, being cautious of my surroundings. At most times i hear quick steps behind me, but as soon as i turn around none things  their, but just marks on the ground.

The marks  look like a child's hand  with a bit of animal features. Claws or something close it, these are unnatural , never seen anything like it before. Whatever it is i don't wish to see it in the flesh. Am curious why it hasn't ended me yet, could it be scared of me. Or is it just toying with me, or just planing.

The sky here is foreign, it has no stars, or moon, just black.  Could this place be a other plant?  Is it hell? Or maybe  a blind spot from the real world, hidden from man never to see, till now.

I made no real progress walking, it seem what direction i point , same view , same ground.  Then in the distance, i hear a cry cut the darkness, the sound send chills in my body. I never heard anything like it, but what ever made it is heading my way!  I begin  running though the blackness, i can hear it getting closer.

I have no were to run , this field it endless. i have no choice but to face this thing, i have to make a stand.  I stop and turn around to face it, but the form stops a few feet away from me. I can only see it outline it, it on all four like a dog. Then it begins edging closer to me, then it begin to stand up on two legs. We now stand at arms lenth. I now have a clear image of what been following me. IT ashy black skin, made it possible for it to hide from me in this place, it body resembles something close to a bear without fur.

We now meet eye to eye, but i see no face, just these shiny yellow eyes hovering there, without support.  My heart is pounding, my mind is racing , trying to think what to do.

Then for a second i close my eyes to think, then it gone just like that. But something don't feel right, my body is still shaking.  I feel something grab my shoulder, i feel wet around that area. Am moving but am not walking, i feel tired and weak. I wanna go to sleep, maybe this is just a dream.

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Preeti Jan 27, 2012

Great work...!!!!!!

Diana Jan 21, 2012

I found the premise of your story quite intriguing. I would suggest capitalizing your I's though. I'm not sure if it's just me but I just find text language clumsy in traditional stories. Other than that, nice job.

Kevin summlen Jan 21, 2012

thanks. oh, yes i know it just a habit i been meaning to beat with the I's, i always forget to capitalized them.

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