Raganuchi

Supernatural Stories | Jul 10, 2012 | 4 min read
20 Votes, average: 3 out of 5
Have you heard of the restaurant Raganuchi? Well, did you ever wonder why it shut down? Do you want to go back in time and hear the real story of why Raganuchi shut down…?

Once there was a little girl named Jill. She hated eating outside for any meal. She was very picky and she only ate foods that were organic, vegetarian, and did not contain yellow dye number 4. There was only one restaurant that suited Jill's taste, Raganuchi. One day, Jill's mom took her to Raganuchi for lunch as a special treat. Jill had just won her school spelling bee and since Jill's mom was very particular about grammar and spelling, she decided to reward Jill. Raganuchi was a very fancy restaurant and it was also very expensive, so Jill's mom only took her there on special occasions. As soon as they entered the restaurant, a waitress showed them to a table. Jill looked around excitedly. She noticed all the familiar sights of her favorite restaurant. The round tables, the soft and puffy sofas to sit on, the small light that was shaped like an ice cream cone that dangled right above the table. Everything was perfect, and it was a perfect addition to the perfect day. As the waiter approached the table to take the order for drinks and appetizers, Jill put her menu down and looked up; she was all ready to order. "I'll take a glass of water with a lemon slice and a bowl of tomato soup," Jill said.

"I'll just have strawberry lemonade," Jill's mom said. As the drinks and soup arrived, Jill smiled. She couldn't contain her happiness, Raganuchi tomato soup was Jill's absolute favorite. Jill's mom was confused, why did Jill enjoy tomato soup at Raganuchi so much, she wondered. It was no different from the other tomato soups at other restaurants. But, she just shook the thought off and sipped her lemonade. Jill looked up at her mom with an astounded look on her face. "What is it Jill," her mom asked.

"Look at my soup…" Jill nervously said. As Jill's mom glanced at the soup, she sighed and said,

"Why do you always throw your napkin in the soup Jill?"

"It's not a napkin, it's a bone!" Jill exclaimed. Her mom took a closer look and realized that it actually was a bone. She marched up to the nearest waiter and showed her the bowl. "Why is there a bone in my daughter's vegetarian soup? I would expect much better care with the food considering how much I pay," Jill's mom screamed.

"I'm so sorry ma'am, I'll go talk to the cook right now" the waitress nervously replied.

"No, you take me to the kitchen and I will speak with the cook."

"I'm sorry ma'am I can't take you in there."

"Well if you won't take me inside, I'll find a way to get in on my own." Jill's mom pushed the waitress away and looked for the kitchen. The whole restaurant was quiet, everyone was watching Jill's mom run around. She finally found the kitchen and slammed the door open. As soon as the door opened, Jill's mom's mouth dropped open. Right there, in the middle of the kitchen, there was a giant pot that was brewing tomato soup. A strong scent of copper arose from the boiling pot. That's when Jill's mom realized that the soup in front of her wasn't made of tomatoes at all, it was made of blood! She was about to open her mouth and scream when a horrid thought popped into her head. Why didn't Jill ever complain about the soup tasting odd or different? Oh no, no no no, not Jill, Jill couldn't, could she… Jill was a vampire!
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Jul 14, 2012

:) :) :)

Jul 14, 2012

I feel sort of bad for criticizing your story. With a name like SHONTELLA I was afraid that you were going to come through my computer and choke the shit out of me for dogging you. Thank you for being kind and gentle with me. Hang in there baby your writi

Shontella Jul 17, 2012

Well ur right, I don'treally enjoy writing gore filled stories I just prefer ghosts or supernatural :)

Jul 10, 2012

I would have been more thrilled and chilled if you had shown me she was a vampire instead of told me she was a vampire. :)

Shontella Jul 14, 2012

I will definitely try show vs. tell in further stories!

Belinda k Jul 10, 2012

Hi, I like the idea of this story. Johnny is right. Had you shown some of her behavior first then used the restaurant to hammer home what she was,would have had more impact. example: "Jill's mother was worried. Jill's eating habits were troublesome. She l

Shontella Jul 14, 2012

Thank you! I actually wrote this story a long time ago, my better story is "the truth about me", but thanks, I will try and add more emotion and background info :)

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