Burried alvie

Suspense Stories | Feb 10, 2012 | 4 min read
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Burried alvie

Clink, Clink Jimmy dug out some dirt.
"That will be enough," he said.
"It's too deep!" Lauren shouted. The moon rose above the dark, eerie clouds, an owl hooted as Lauren put the coffin in the ground. "I don't want you doing this," She sighed.
"Come on its only one night. Besides, no one comes to the old Indian Cemetery! There's only going to be like two feet of dirt over the casket."
"You have your tube to breathe through right?"
"Of Course I do," he said reassuring her.
He jumped into the coffin with his water and phone so he could keep in touch with Lauren. The hole was about four and a half feet deep. Lauren closed the casket, nailed it shut, and lowered it down. She began to shovel dirt into the hole. The last thing she did was put in the two and a half foot tube so Jimmy could breathe.
She dialed his number on her phone and called him above the surface.
"You okay?" she said, with a quiver in her voice
"Yeah it's really cozy down here." He said mocking her.
"Haha funny" she said sarcastically, "I'll be back tomorrow at six AM to dig you out ok?" She whispered in the phone.
"Ok Bye. I'll see you in the morning" he said. She started her truck and headed down the road. She traveled down a dirt road surrounded by woods and forest. She felt like eyes were watching her every move. Chills ran down her back as she thought of terrible situations Jimmy could get into. But she got a grip on herself and kept driving.
Lauren got home late at 12:30 AM and ran upstairs in her room and fell asleep.
Rain started to fall as she drifted to sleep. A light shower swept over Ann Arbor, as Jimmy laid there dozing in and out of sleep.
Jimmy finally woke up. This coffin is so hot, Jimmy thought. A rain drop hit him through the tube, then another. He started freaking out; he shouted "Help! Help! I'm trapped!" He got out his phone to call Lauren. The phone rang and rang then went to voice mail. He listened in terror "Hey its Lauren leave a message." Beep.
"LAUREN HELP I'M STUCK ITS DOWN POURING I DON'T WANT TO DO THIS COME GET ME!!!!!!!!!!!! I DONT WANT TO BE DOWN HERE ANYMORE!"
He laid there for what seemed like hours and hours listening for his phone to go off. Then it occurred to him he could call his mom. He got out his phone but, just as he typed in 616 his phone died and turned off.
"NO!" he shouted. I hate this get me out of here I want help! He hit the coffin with all his strength in all his shouting and panic he passed out.
Jimmy woke up and was very confused but he then remembered his idea and felt stupid for even considering doing this.
"What time is it?" he said aloud. He looked at the watch on his wrist. He could barely see. The time said 3:30 AM; the watch that was on his wrist was a present from Lauren and just looking at it brought tears to his eyes. He was scared something happened to her, or what if she forgot? What if no one comes to get him he thought about his last words he said to the most important people in his life. Before he left the house he and his mom got in an awful fight and he stormed out of the house. He sobbed himself to sleep.
An older woman walked into the cemetery at around 5:30 AM when the sun was just beginning to rise. Her little gold lab was with her wondering around the remains of Indians in the old cemetery. She had a grandfather buried here. She noticed the newly buried dirt pile. "That's weird; no one ever gets buried here anymore. Someone probably did it overnight." She said to her dog like it actually understood.
Her dog went to the new tomb and acted weird as if someone was in danger. He barked and started to dig. The woman immediately corrected the dog and they walked around and observed the pile of dirt more. As she was observing the newly dug dirt pile she stepped on Jimmy's breathing tube and tripped. She didn't notice it. She got up and walked away. She paid her respects to her grandfather and left.
Jimmy woke up. "What's wrong I can't breathe" he tried to breathe through the tube but got a mouth full of dirt. He flipped out he clawed at the coffin till his fingers were bloody he punched the lid as hard as he could until his knuckles bled.
The sun creaked through the blinds and woke Lauren up. She looked at the alarm clock. It read 7:45 AM. She screamed louder than ever.
"Damn it! i'm late!" She got dressed, she grabbed her keys. Then she ran out the door.
She rushed out the house and got in her truck. Her engine roared then shut off. She turned the key helplessly trying to get the engine to start. Lauren got out of the car and sprinted down the street. Her phone beeped as she was sprinting down the terrifying dirt road listening to the voice mail Jimmy sent her late last night.
She cut through the woods, traveled through some thickets and made it to the Indian cemetery. A sign read "Turn back, no trespassing." She saw the newly buried earth but saw no tube. She went crazy she didn't know how long he had been without air or if he was even still alive. In all of the time she was freaking out at home about how late she was she didn't think of bringing a shovel. She had two options. Run back home and get a shovel. Or dig him out with her hands. She had to save him she ran to the dirt pile and dug with her hands.
"Jimmy, Jimmy! Can you hear me?" she yelled at the top of her lungs. She didn't hear a response which made her dig even faster.
She got down to the casket, and dug all the dirt out. The casket had to be opened. Lauren got on the other side of the cheap wooden casket and pulled. Lauren felt a sharp pain in her wrist, she whimpered in pain. Her wrist became red, she bled in the side of her skin but, she was determined to open the casket. After five minutes of pain and pulling, the casket finally budged.
Jimmy's body laid there motionless. She teared up and cried she screamed and yelled and shouted. She wished she never agreed.
Lauren stood there sobbing thinking what to do. She got off the ground with a tear running down her eye; Lauren piled the dirt back in the hole on the coffin and left the cemetery.
A sudden bang came from beneath the earth under the pile of dirt where Jimmy was buried alive, and no one was there to hear it or rescue Jimmy who was still alive in the coffin.

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Tyler Mar 1, 2012

very cool. Made me feel like I was in a coffin, almost freaked myself out!

Cam Mar 31, 2012

thank you so much, im glad i entertain people with my writing.

Amit Feb 15, 2012

really nice story. good job Cam.

Cardwell Feb 10, 2012

Nicely done!

Cam Mar 31, 2012

thanks alot i wrote this for a class project on creative writing.

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